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In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. Do the advantages of this new approach outweigh the disadvantages?

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Traditionally, delivering a lecture is how the majority of students a
re taught
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were taught
in the p
ast whereas
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past, whereas
updated
technology
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 is replacing the method of lecture to students in the era of
technology
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. In my opinion, there are much more benefits rather than drawbacks.
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 with, as
technology
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 has been developed plenty of materials are introduced in education. By providing different kinds of studying materials, teachers can draw i
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on
s
tudents
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students'
student
student's
interest more easily.
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, in the classroom, personal laptop or tablet PC is used for students to search information related to the subject. b
y
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By
interacting with teachers and topics they are learning, students can be more f
ascinated
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fascinating
and never get bored as opposed to sitting and listening to lectures.
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, new technologies can have a positive impact on not only interest but
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 the effectiveness of learning. The more they participate in the class, the better understanding they w
il
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
well
get. According to the research conducted by UBC, r
ememberance
the ability to recall past occurrences
remembrance
will be improved as students get more opportunities to be active in class. I have
also
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 seen an instance that a high school class in German projected a hologram of whale who is swimming in the ocean to the wall of gymnastic.
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, students could see the exact same size of a wild whale splashing water in front of their eyes. They had a better understanding of b
iology
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the biology
and movements of a whale. To sum up, diverse methods of learning can bring better consequences in their interest and understanding compared to traditional lecture.
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, new
technology
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 should be used more in education.

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