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The bar graph above shows avarage earning in the Republic of Ireland in 5 different years, with projections for the future. Earnings are in US dollars ($).

The bar graph above shows avarage earning in the Republic of Ireland in 5 different years, with projections for the future. Earnings are in US dollars ($).
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The given bar graph illustrates information about
avarage
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average
 earnings in the Republic of Ireland from 1986 to 2018 with future projections. The unit of
corrency
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currency
 is in United States dollars.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that wages slightly increased every decade, expect 2008, when salary was a bit decreased.
However
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next
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 10 years
amount
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the amount
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 of pay sharply climbed to
peak
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the peak
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 point. Average earnings began
with
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at
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 almost $8000 in 1968 and slightly increased
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to
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over
than
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apply
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$10.000 after
decade
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a decade
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. In 1988 the salary consequences approximately $13000,
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however
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,however
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 10 years later, in 1998, it
further
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 improved to its highest recorded value of about $15000. The only notable exception to
this
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 expansion in levels of pay was
2008
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in 2008
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 when remuneration decreased by around $1,000 from the peak of 1998. But,
this
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 trend didn't matter in
growth
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the growth
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 of incomes in the future which projections of over $20,000

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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