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People behave differently when they wear different type of clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave?

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Different clothes influence people to behave differently, not because it has altered themselves, but because people's perception
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of
 them has changed). It is considered that
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the actions
 of
individual
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individuals
an individual
the individual
 vary according to their appearance.
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, I will
enuciate
bring into being
initiate
enunciate
incite
 both points in favour as well as against
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 ideology in subsequent paragraphs.
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 of all, the clothes change the way people behave, every transforming action is suitable
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for
 a particular situation.
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, the environment along with different attires require the distinct
behaviour
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, and in day to day life, people act according to the requirements of that place in terms of outfits for making successful interactions. If people wear branded/labelled
clothes
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clothes, then
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 they may represent themselves in richer category. The researchers believe that clothing holds symbolic meaning, they claim that the influence of clothes depend both on wearing the clothes and meaning it invokes (represent) in people's hand, as by wearing lab coat, individuals behave as a highly intelligent and precise
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do work with accuracy) personality even sometimes they are not.
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, there is a minority of those people who do not need to change their clothes to impress others and the minor group includes, probably, those self- confident and or those indi6who do care about the thinking of others, as these individuals think that it is possible to gain popularity without creating any psychological impact on others’ mind.
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, owing to innate
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inborn) abilities, people exhibit distinct patterns of
behaviour
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 like education and moral values vary in different regions and common forms of
behaviour
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 are not similar in
diverse world
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the diverse world
. Some mortals are open minded in their daily interactions, so, for them clothes do not matter at all. To conclude,
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 some people wear different attires
formaking
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for making
 snap judgment about themselves in front of
others but
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others, but
this
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 thing is not appropriate in all the
condition
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conditions
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human's
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human
 internal
behaviour
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 is of extreme
important
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importance
 for depicting nature.
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