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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this happen? What can government dot to help reduce the amount of litter?

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The waste
production
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 has become
contentious topic
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a contentious topic
 as it is rising at an alarming rate through industries and households.
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 increasing rubbish is happening due to certain reasons
such
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 as packaging items and the causal attitudes of people,
this
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occuring
come to pass
occurring
 can be reduced by enacting stringent laws and using recycling system.
Firstly
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, packaging materials significantly affect to increase the
production
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 of
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litter
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a litter
litters
.
In other words
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, nowadays companies
use
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variety
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a variety
 of packaging
such
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 as plastic polythene and rubber which are more attractive whereas these are not only non-decomposable but
also
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 non-biodegradable
.
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.
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Therefore due
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Therefore, due
 to
this
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pacakaging
the business of packing
packaging
 material
,
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,
the
production
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 of trash has risen.
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secondly
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Secondly
, careless attitude of people is another reason for excessive
production
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 of
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litter
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a litter
.Clearly, the attitudes of people have changed as they prefer to acquire new things
instead
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 of reusing and repairing the old ones
.
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.
As the mass consumption of new items are discarded which lead to the escalation of
litter
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production
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.So these are two
factor
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factors
 which are responsible for excessive
production
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 of garbage. The solutions are not
simple but
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simple, but
 they do exist.The government should enact strict laws that will force to companies to
use
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 only bio-degradable materials for packaging purposes.As well, to
use
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 materials that decompose easily, manufacturers should invent
new packaging material
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a new packaging material
new packaging materials
 that can be recycled.
As a result
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,
this
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 will automatically reduce the amount of
litter
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.
Moreover
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,
government
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the government
governments
 should encourage to people to adapt recycling method.
For instance
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, recently
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 read on
facebook
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Facebook
 about a beach in
Australia where
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Australia, where
 machines are installed and people can buy food
amd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 beverages by submitting used plastic bottles.So these kind of motivational activities should be introduced. In conclusion, though many reasons
such
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 as the
use
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 of plastic packaging materials and careless attitude of humans contribute to increase in waste
production
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 , solutions can be taken to mitigate
this
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 amount of
litter
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 which are by implementing stringent laws and promoting recycling process
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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