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some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activity to what extend do you agree

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In recent decades, individual by itself has found new meaning and value. The intellectual has lost its wholesomeness and has been divided into several subgroups;
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 I am not able to announce neither a simple agreement or disagreement nor its extents. The social living or its new civilization needs team-work and co-existing, the individuality has great value which cannot be denied due to group activities.
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 originality may be influenced by different cultures, still according to psychologists 21st century uniqueness have become more valuable than its previous centuries. Based on the science of psychology, healthy individual can create a healthy society, to have an agreeable performance and activities within its groups.
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 the other hand, as reported by biologists intellectual is a more matter of genetics, which specified before birth by mother and father,
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 what one do or learn after birth. Socializing and living with others demand sort of intellectual skills, developed by doing group activities. These specific intellectual skills, are more social skills which more related to the learning ability that Intelligence quotient.
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 means some of the intellectual or some part of it can be educated and trained according to the level of person's intellect one show. In conclusion, as I mentioned before, giving a simple agreement or answer is not only difficult but practically impossible. If I give and agreement it will considered as neglecting genetics effect on the intellects.
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 the other hand a complete disagreement shows, ignoring the effect of society on the intellectual skills, I admit the fine line between oneness, genetics, intellectual skills and their effects by doing group works create an inseparable cycle.

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