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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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The number of visitors to the areas which has extreme conditions has been increasing in recent times. Even though, travelling to these places provides people with great adventure and gives them a chance to see rare creatures, they often requires a great deal of investment and always has some potential risk. One of the main advantages of travelling to difficult places is the thrilling experience that people get when they travel to regions when no or less human has seen before.
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 makes them to take strenuous efforts to explore various tough terrain or marine areas.
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, they could see some uncommon animals, that can be only seen in certain locations.
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, tourists can learn survival skills in challenging circumstances,
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 expenditure, people often need physical and mental preparation in order to visit these locations.
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, there are lots of chances in which things could go wrong, and put peoples' lives at danger as we do not poses complete knowledge about these regions.
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, Sahara desert is well known for poisonous rattlesnakes, so we need to take proper precautions before visiting to these areas.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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