Some people think that drug addicts should be treated like criminals and sent to jail, while others believe that they should be treated like patients and sent hospital. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

It is considered by some that
drug
addicts
is
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are
a criminal who have to put in prison, while there are others who think that they are patients who should stay in hospital. In my opinion, I believe we should treat
drug abuser
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drug abusers
like patients and put them in the hospital. On the one hand, many think that
drug
addicts will do abuse to their families or other people.
For example
when they need
drug
and they do not have money to buy,
hence
they will ask
to
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for
their families. If they do not get what they want, they will do everything
such
as cruel things, violence, hit somebody to get the
drug
.
This
condition which
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condition, which
encourage
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encourages
people assume that the one who use
drug
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the drug
drugs
is
danger
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dangerous
and we should not get along with them.
On the other hand
, having people who are
drug
addicted in the hospital and treating them like patients would prevent the bad things
for instance
violence and abuse happened.
For example
when they need
drug
and they can not find the way to get it, because nurses and doctors have already given them the
first
action to prevent that things
happenes
come to pass
happened
.
In other words
doctor can control them. By giving rehabilitations and education for
drug
user will help them to not use
drug
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drugs
anymore.
Also
, we can
safe
save from ruin, destruction, or harm
save
them and help them to find the right way to get better life in the future.
Finally
, in my opinion, we should not serve
drug
addicts like criminal, but we have to treat them like patients because we are
same human beings
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the same human beings
. In conclusion, perhaps sometimes
drug abuser
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the drug abuser
are
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is
danger
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a danger
to others, but treating them in a better way will help them and ourselves
also
.
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