Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an satisfactory job or shortage of money.Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situation

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Nowadays demanding for
money
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is increasing, while some people prefer to accept a poor situation like shortage of
money
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and bad working conditions, while
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
agree with those who believe that it is better to earn much
money
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for two reasons On the one hand, accepting a poor situation and less
job
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salary can be
also
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the best option for people.
Nowadays most
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Nowadays, most
people
is trying
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are trying
to earn much
money
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,
as a result
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, it causes
diiferent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
kinds of health problems,
such
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as chronic stress, weaker performance, inability to concentrate.
For example
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,
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,
chronic stress can be due to work pressure. People
always wants
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always want
are always wanting
to find
well-paid
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a well-paid job
job
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and become wealthy.
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, it has been shown that people who don't work under pressure,
coukd
requests polite permission
could
live longer that others
Although
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people
could't
could not
couldn't
could
afford to buy
expensive car
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expensive cars
an expensive car
amd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
cutting-age technologies, they tend to live in a healthy
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
. It plays
crucial role
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a crucial role
in their working life.
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
would agree with those who
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believes
believed
that people should get
more competetive salary
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a more competitive salary
more competitive salary
and find
rewarding
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rewarding jobs
a rewarding job
job
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in their field.
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, it creates
opportunites
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
to lead a comfortable life and improve their overall living standards
.
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.
If people couldn't make much
money
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in their field, they should invest
money
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in other fields.
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, if people set up a business, they make a profit, as their business grows, they can hire employees, it creates to earn much
money
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than others.
Furthemore
in addition
Furthermore
, most people feel more motivated by earning much
money
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,
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,
as a result
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they reach their real potential.
Finally
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, wealthy people can help
also
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other people, who is trying to lift out of poverty. In coclusion, while there are some reasons to believe that people should work in a low salary
job
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and poor situations, my own vies is that people must make much
money
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than ever

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Contentment
  • Resilience
  • Personal growth
  • Endurance
  • Initiative
  • Advancement
  • Catalyst
  • Financial stability
  • Status quo
  • Innovation
  • Missed opportunities
  • Life satisfaction
  • Adverse situations
  • Taking control
  • Risk assessment
  • Change management
  • Self-improvement
  • Motivation
  • Stagnation
  • Proactivity
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