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describe a graph that shows average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers.

describe a graph that shows average growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, globalisers and non-globalisers.
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The given bar chart
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 demonstrates the average
rate
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 of domestic products in different
nations
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, categorized into three groups, wealthy countries, globalisers and
non-globalisers
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non-globalised
. As it's obvious from the graph, wealthy
nations
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 reached the highest average
rate
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, about 5% in
1960s
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,
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however
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 they experienced a significant drop between
1960s
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 and 1990s and fell to 2%.
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, developing countries that had a global approach
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 had an upward trend during
this
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 period and growth from about 1% to nearly 5%.
this
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 nation reached the highest
rate
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 of domestic products among two other
nations
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 in
1990s
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. we can infer from the graph that the GDP
rate
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 in developing countries adopting a non-global approach, fluctuated during
these year
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 and they showed their top production
rate
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 in
1970s
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the 1970s
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.
Also
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, it is noticeable that
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 that time, all three
nations
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 had
an
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about
same
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the same
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 GDP. In conclusion, as the graph illustrates, adopting a global approach to business will improve
the
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domestic
productions
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production
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, nations with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestic products
  • wealthy countries
  • globalisers
  • non-globalisers
  • average growth
  • graph
  • trends
  • economies
  • advanced technology
  • globalization
  • global trade
  • integration
  • slow growth rate
  • participation
  • economic growth
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