The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death rates in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101.
The pie charts show information about different
energy
sources in France in 1995 and 2005.
The leading source of energy
production during the
both years made up Remove the article
apply
coal
and gas, which brought together around 60 Change preposition
of coal
percent
of the total number. Change the spelling
per cent
However
, coal use significantly decreased, gas
started to be used Correct word choice
and gas
on
one Change preposition
apply
percent
more. Petrol stood Change the spelling
per cent
one
Correct your spelling
on
the
Correct article usage
apply
third
place both in 1995 and 2005,
but lost its number from around 30 Remove the comma
apply
percent
to 20, which made up a Change the spelling
per cent
third
from
its common use. Nuclear power in Change preposition
of
energy
production wasn’t popular during the mentioned periods, but a sudden spurge could be observed to 10 rate
in comparison with 1995, where it made up only 6 and a half Change to a plural noun
rates
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
from
the total Change preposition
of
energy
manufacture
.
Replace the word
manufactured
I
could be seen that alternative sources create power Correct pronoun usage
It
started
to develop during the period of 10 years. Its usage stood at the number of only 5 Correct pronoun usage
that started
percent
in 1995Change the spelling
per cent
,
but Remove the comma
apply
was
increased twice in 10 years.
Unnecessary verb
apply
Overall
, the most significant fluctuations were linked to the
petrol decease of use. It was changed to nuclear and alternative sources of power manufacturing.Correct article usage
apply
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "third".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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