Some people feel that entertainers such as film stars, pop musicians or sports stars are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which other types of job should be highly paid? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is well known that people who are involved in the entertainment industry are well- paid and most of the people think that
this
pay is not truly achieved. I think that in many cases the pay is excessive, even if I am sure that none of them is doing an easy job. Apart from sports stars, whose career is really short -lived and so they have to ensure most of their living in a brief period, other entertainers are over-paid. I can see that singing and/or acting are really hard work, you have to spend hours exercising in order to achieve the perfect performance and please your public, but nowadays they are being paid too much. Million of dollars are given to film stars, without any assurance that the film will be a success. The main reason that lead me to believe that many entertainers are paid too much is because many co-workers aren’t so well-paid. There are tons of actors and singers who are paid a misery for giving outstanding performances. I doubt that there are many theatre actors who are paid as much as their
collegues
an associate that one works with
colleagues
in films, even though acting in a live performance is way harder than a filmed one
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This
, I think, demonstrates that they
are not paid
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don't pay
do not pay
for the type of task they perform, but more because of what they represent: a well-known and assuring face that can sell everything.
On the contrary
, life risking jobs,
such
as fireman, policeman, nurses or doctors, are not paid so well. How can
this
be fair? People who chose to live every day at risk of their own security, with the only purpose to better the life of the community are paid less, even though they work long hours. Another category that in my opinion should be gain more money is the one collecting all the workers who practice a physical draining job, like people who spend their time in a construction site or on the field to ensure that everyone has something to eat or serving at the restaurants.
This
type of workers will continue to work even when they are almost on the point to break, because their pay is so low that they couldn’t be able to save any money, so if they want to survive, they have to continue working. In conclusion, I think that even though no profession is easy
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we should start to consider the entertainment workers for what they do and not what they could sell. In my opinion, there are some jobs that deserve more recognition, more respect and more money than “being a star”.
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