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Dear Sir
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Madam, I, Oguzhan Cinar, wish to apply for the Master in “
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Construction
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Project
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Management
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” at the Heriot-Watt University for the 2020
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21 intake. I am strongly convinced that
this
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 master course can be a remarkable step for my future career as a
Project
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 Manager in a well-respected and leading
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company
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companies
. In 2016, I graduated from Istanbul Technical University (ITU) with a bachelor’s degree in civil engineering. ITU is one of the most prominent educational institutions in Turkey. In
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, they accept only 1% of the total participants to the admission test.
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, it is considered by QS ranking one of the top 150 Universities in Civil Engineering Subjects. From the beginning of the academic period, I always tried to improve myself in the
management
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 area as well as technical skills. Due to that reason, I got selective courses related to
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construction
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management
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 and I acquired essential skills related to engineering science.
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, I was awarded to develop my dissertation in the “
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Construction
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” field. In
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, only the projects coming from the best students in
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construction
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management
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 and related courses are accepted. I wrote my
thesis
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 on “Process of Innovation in
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Construction
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 & Financing of Innovation and Infrastructure Projects”. The
thesis
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 has 3 main
part
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parts
 which are; - Innovation, The Process of Innovation and Its Application
on
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for
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Construction
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 - Financing of Innovation Projects - Financing of Infrastructure Projects. After completion of the
thesis
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 and graduated from the university, the
thesis
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 had been accepted by
Project
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 and
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Construction
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Management
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 Conference (In Turkish abbreviated as PYYK) to be presented in the conference.
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year
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 of my university degree, I was offered a long-term internship for a
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 Control Engineer position in Dogus Group, which is one of the biggest investment
company
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 in Turkey. During the
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 from 09
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2015 to 07
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2016, I took an active role in more than 40 domestic and international projects in the scope of fit-out, hotel, renovation
project
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 from the pre-contracting part to post-contracting processes. Thanks to
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 long-term internship, I have gained
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 control, quantity surveying, subcontractors
management
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 and negotiation skills. After I graduated and completed the internship, the subsidiary of the Dogus
Group which
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Group, which
 is Dogus
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Construction
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 and
Trade wherein
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Trade, wherein
 the top 250 in ENR list, has offered me for “
Cost
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 Control and
Budget
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 Engineer” position in Al-Rayyan Road
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Construction
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 and Improvement
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 which has a value of 1.3 B USD and located in Doha, Qatar. My main role was to update the activity-based
budget
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 daily basis,
calculation
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the calculation
 of the
cost
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 of the
BoQ
a written work or composition that has been published (printed on pages bound together)
book
 items and claims as per CEESM4, which was the base of Global Settlement Agreement
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 related to changing
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the contract type
 from unit rate to lump sum. I
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 have involved in the tender processes for 2 projects in Qatar which the
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 has offered quotations to expand its turnover in the country. During the tender process, I calculated the direct
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 of the tender for both
project
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 and submitted to the related
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 Manager. After a
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, I gained skills
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 as the topics of Global Settlement issues, Tendering in International Environments, Calculation of the
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 of the Claims and Submission of the
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Box
 Items, SWOT analysis. I agreed with Yapi Merkezi
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Construction
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 and Industry Inc for the SGR
project
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 located in the city of Tanzania, Dar
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a radioactive transuranic element produced by bombarding plutonium with neutrons
Es
 Salaam for the
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 Control Position. The
project
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 consists in the
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construction
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 of a high-speed railway that will increase the capacity of transportation of the materials, goods and the people from
Dar
to a considerable degree; very much
far
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a radioactive transuranic element produced by bombarding plutonium with neutrons
Es
 Salaam to Morogoro and the contract value is 1.2 Billion of USD. In July 2017, I moved to Tanzania and set up the
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 control and related system in the
Project
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. After I prepared the
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budget
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 of the
Project
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, I decided to improve and develop the
budget
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 reporting format of the
company
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. In
fact
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, I submitted the
budget
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 as an Activity Based as well as
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 Code Based so it allowed me to follow the expenditures more accurately. It was the most significant innovation
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in
 the
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 and thanks to
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, the
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 has saved a huge amount of money and decreased the unnecessary expenses so that the profit margin has been increased.
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, I would like to underline the
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 that I always have had an international spirit. Since the
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year
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 of the university, I
have been travelling
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have travelled
 to different countries all around the world to expand my vision and to learn about different cultures. After tasting the excitement of learning new cultures, I decided to work abroad in international environments. Now, I have travelled more than 30 countries and worked in 3 continents. I am now 5 years experienced civil engineer with proven skills in
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construction
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management
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.
This
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 experience helped me build confidence in myself. I believe that
Master’s
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a Master’s
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Construction
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Project
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Management
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 will be a great value-added to my practical work experience. It is obvious that considering the outcomes of the courses and their detailed contents will improve my skills to be a visionary manager. In conclusion, I appreciate you considering my application and I would be honoured to be part of your Master’s in
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Construction
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Project
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Management
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 at the Heriot-Watt University for the 2020
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21 intake. Thank you for your consideration. Sincerely, Oğuzhan Çınar

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