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Some people think that the education system should only focus on preparing students for employment, while others believe it has other important functions. Discuss both side and then give your opinion

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In
this
 modern era,
education
 is
very essential thing
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a very essential thing
.Many people believe that colleges and universities must have to concentrate on ready the students for
futur
the time yet to come
future
further
 Jobes.But on
other hand people
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the other hand people
also
 think that that there are many other valuable things on which
education
system
 have to focus.In my opinion
education
system
also
 have to
encroge
contribute to the progress or growth of
encourage
 students for extra activities.
However
, every coin has two
side
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sides
(
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(
one is positive and other is
negetative
characterized by or displaying negation or denial or opposition or resistance; having no positive features
negative
)
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)
. If
education
system
is only try
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only tries
 to ready students for
employment
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employment, then
then
 students can'
t
 gain any other important experience. Which they must have to learn in their student life like sports, music etc.
Education
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The education system
system
 is responsible to make
student
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the student
students
 confident for problems of real life.
For example
, if colleges only focus on
employment
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employment, then
then
 students can'
t
 learn what they have to do if they don'
t
 get
job
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jobs
 after graduation.
In addition
, there are many other factors on which
education
system
 must have to provide knowledge to the students
such
 as time management and how to make
your self
reflexive form of "you"
yourself
 stable In difficult time. Because these are few golden
besic
a relation that provides the foundation for something
basis
 fundamentalists of life. In 2008, one government research shows that 45% people divide
whoonly
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who only
 focus on their placement and get their jobs right away after graduation.
Main reason
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The main reason
 why they don'
t
 survive is that
thay
people in general
they
that
 don'
t
 know how to get stable in difficult time. To conclude,
education
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the education system
system
 must have to focus on other activities rather than only focus on how to prepare students for placement. Because if students have
knowledge
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the knowledge
then
 they can
easy
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easily
 get jobs without any placement.

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