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Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#inventors #society #doctors
Some people believe being a doctor is a noble profession and they are much more of importance to
society
 than scholars and inventors.In my opinion, it is the other way around, people who discover new things are more important than any other professions which follow already established theories.
firstly
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Firstly
,
Accept space
,
On the one hand Doctors
follow
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follows
 a set of rules that they master in their 5 year degree in medicines.These principles are already established by someone earlier and they just follow it
relegiously
by religion
religiously
.They are not inventing
any
quantifier; used with either mass nouns or plural count nouns to indicate an unspecified number or quantity
some
 new methodologies and
anyoneone
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anyone one
 with proper education and training can become a doctor
on the other hand
 discoveries are made by scientists and scholars, which provides a new direction to science
nevertheless
 every one cannot be a scientist or scholar, it takes a great deal of determination and natural gifts to become one.
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
Even though doctors are valuable to
society
, they usually become helpless in pandemic situations and new emergencies,
for example
 the recent
out break
a sudden violent spontaneous occurrence (usually of some undesirable condition)
outbreak
 of cover 19 proved that there is no previous theory or medication which can cure
this
 disease.Now the world is merely begging for a new invention in
medical field
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the medical field
 which could find an antidote for
this
 severe plague. So in my opinion
,
Accept space
,
eventhough
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even though
 doctors do a great deal for the
society
, they are not as important as scholars or scientists whose contribution are much more valuable for the
upliftment
 of our
society
.

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