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The prevention of health problems and illness is more important than treatment and medicine.Government funding should reflect this To what extent do you agree?

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These days, a common discussion all over the world is that economic
progress
 is significant or other types of
progress
. In
this
 respect many governments take the
view
 that economic
progress
 is the most important. Some
people
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people, by
by
contrast believe
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contrast, believe
 that an another
types
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type
 of
progress
 is equally important for the
first
view
. In one
view
 economic
progress
 is most important to man government because, how much The wealthier
country
 get due to improve a
country
in
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on
 all
side
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sides
 if costing suitable on another thing
such
 as
building university
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building, university
, tourism place, improve public transportation and pay money to citizen for rise quality life or helping in an emergency situation. Even with
have
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having
 more money can be
improvement
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improved
 for athletic goal through building stadium or hire the best coach in all the world and lots of other activities.
On the other hand
, another opinion is that types of
progress
 are more important for
country
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the country
countries
. But I’m totally opposed to the
view
. By reason of,
however there
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however, there
are
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is
 a lot of valuable
progress
that is
 far
important
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more important
 than rich. But for every goal, Money is necessary.
Such
 as helping to another people
at
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in
of
 another
country on
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country, on
 the emergency situation or expanded activity on artistic and sport activities. In
conclusion based
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conclusion, based
 on the gives
argument it
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argument, it
 can be inferred that
however
 there are a lot of valuable
progress but
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progress, but
 economic
progress
 is way important that because many is necessary for every goal.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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