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Some people say that children should spend their free time on clubs and extra classes. Other, however, believe they should spend their leisure time doing activities with their families. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people said that students should spend their spare
time
 on clubs and extra curriculum activities.
However
, others argued that it is better for youngsters to enjoy their free
time
 by doing things they enjoy during their childhood
time
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of
this
 view and conclude by explaining my own view. Since the world becoming more competitive for youngster to find a high salary and decent position in a company compared to couple decades ago.
As a result
, students, nowadays, were required to attend various after-school clubs and extra classes in their free
time
.
For example
, taking part in sports clubs, painting activities and voluntary works can not only help them maintain their academic performance, but
also
 build their interest in different field of profession.
However
, it is
also
 crucial for children to spend their
time
 with their family and friends. As we grew up, parents, siblings and friends were important characters for youngster and it is
also
 important to remain the relationship among us.
For instance
, having dinner, doing exercise or watching movies together are simple ways to connect people's feelings and emotions. And I believe these were how we made worthy and unforgettable memories of childhood. In conclusion,
although
 it is important to maintain children's academic performance at school and be competitive for the upcoming future. I believe family matter most and should be placed in the
first
 priority regardless any situations.
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