Success is often measured by wealth and material belongings. Do you think wealth is the best measure of success? What makes a successful person?

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success
is frequently associated with richness or a high
fin
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higher
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success
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there are several factors that define or make people pros
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in fortunate circumstances financially; moderately rich
prosperous
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success
, over
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the overwhelming majority
people probably consider a
success
in accordance with the financial stability and they do not take into account that
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person
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the ultimate goal
an ultimate goal
every
person
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success
is explained by a number of other factors, apart from wealth.
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person
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success
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success
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