IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 2.5

Many cities experience a traffic problem nowadays. What are the best ways to solve the traffic problems that cities have?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Many cities experience a
traffic
Use synonyms
problem
Use synonyms
 nowadays regarding
this
Linking Words
 there are a lot of reasons. Everyone knows twenty
first
Linking Words
 century is technology century because everything proceeding to improving
that is
Linking Words
 why, electronic things and
vehicles
Suggestion
vehicle's
 production are increasing. Some people think
time
Use synonyms
 is more
valuable
Accept comma addition
valuable, therefore
therefore
Linking Words
, they do not want to spend
time
Use synonyms
 in a vain way so people utilize cars
,
Accept space
,
computers and so on.
due
Suggestion
Due
 to compulsion. Many people consider to
Use synonyms
time
Accept comma addition
time, however
however
Linking Words
 they do not pay attention to themselves healthy and ecology of
Use synonyms
city
Suggestion
cities
the city
. Part of people suppose if they buy a car they will be
rest
Suggestion
rested
 and their lifestyle are being verified. In additional, the biggest
problem
Use synonyms
 is
inappropriate
Suggestion
an inappropriate time
time
Use synonyms
 proof of
this
Linking Words
 like majority
go
Suggestion
going
 to house at the same hour undoubtedly, rush hour takes place. In my
Use synonyms
city there
Accept comma addition
city, there
 is a
traffic
Use synonyms
problem
Use synonyms
 mainly
this
Linking Words
 situation happens in rush hour. In my view
,
Accept space
,
 the best way to solve
Use synonyms
traffic
Suggestion
the traffic problem
problem
Use synonyms
 is to attract people to sport in
this
Linking Words
 case
,
Accept space
,
urbans’
Suggestion
 occupants can ride bicycle.
For example
Linking Words
,
Accept space
,
 Amsterdam, the capital of
Netherlands
Suggestion
the Netherlands
 and population of
city
Use synonyms
 use bike
also
Linking Words
 the
city
Use synonyms
 is preserved by people as vehicles are very harmful
for
Suggestion
to
 nature. If
this
Linking Words
 case
occured
come to pass
occurred
 other cities the
traffic
Use synonyms
problem
Use synonyms
 would be eliminated.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: