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Many cities experience a traffic problem nowadays. What are the best ways to solve the traffic problems that cities have?

#cities #traffic
Many cities experience a
traffic
problem
 nowadays regarding
this
 there are a lot of reasons. Everyone knows twenty
first
 century is technology century because everything proceeding to improving
that is
 why, electronic things and
vehicles
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vehicle's
 production are increasing. Some people think
time
 is more
valuable
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valuable, therefore
therefore
, they do not want to spend
time
 in a vain way so people utilize cars
,
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,
computers and so on.
due
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Due
 to compulsion. Many people consider to
time
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time, however
however
 they do not pay attention to themselves healthy and ecology of
city
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cities
the city
. Part of people suppose if they buy a car they will be
rest
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rested
 and their lifestyle are being verified. In additional, the biggest
problem
 is
inappropriate
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an inappropriate time
time
 proof of
this
 like majority
go
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going
 to house at the same hour undoubtedly, rush hour takes place. In my
city there
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city, there
 is a
traffic
problem
 mainly
this
 situation happens in rush hour. In my view
,
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,
 the best way to solve
traffic
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the traffic problem
problem
 is to attract people to sport in
this
 case
,
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,
urbans’
 occupants can ride bicycle.
For example
,
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,
 Amsterdam, the capital of
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
 and population of
city
 use bike
also
 the
city
 is preserved by people as vehicles are very harmful
for
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to
 nature. If
this
 case
occured
come to pass
occurred
 other cities the
traffic
problem
 would be eliminated.

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