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Wild animals have no place in the21st century, and the protection is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#animals #place #st #century #protection #waste #resources
Symbiotic interactions among organisms are essential to the ecosystems; they provide a balance that can only be achieved by the
organisms’
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 working together.
As a result
 of rapid deforestation and industrialization, many species are on the brink of extinction, threatening the delicate balance of the ecosystem. No matter how insignificant some of them may seem, all existing organisms, let alone wild
animals
, play a crucial role and
hence
 should be preserved. It may seem that dangerous carnivores in forests may have no role to play in our lives.
However
, barely are we aware
how
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 important they are to us. An imbalance in the
predator to prey
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predator-to-prey
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 ratio has a direct impact on us.
For example
, a decrease in the number of carnivores will lead to an increase in the number of herbivores that would encroach upon our farmlands and destroy our crops.
Moreover
, it is the wild
animals
 and plants that brought
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the earth
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earth
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 to
life
 millennia of years before humans were born.
This
 makes studying wild
animals
 important to understand how
life
 evolved. It
also
 helps us understand and connect with nature and appreciate other forms of
life
.
In addition
 to the above, wild
animals
 are used as experimental subjects in various fields of
studies
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such
 as medicine.
Although
 by moving to cities, we seem to have separated ourselves from the wild, a lot of us do get excited by the idea of going to a forest or
wild
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wildlife
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life
 sanctuary where we see these
animals
 moving freely on the vast landscapes they belong to. There’s no doubt that wildlife photography, one of the most difficult genres in photography, is increasingly becoming popular.
Therefore
, it would be selfish of us to let a major part of nature get destroyed at least partly
due to
 our harmful practices.
Protection
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The protection
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 of wild
animals
 is an investment and not a waste of resources in preserving our endangered planet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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