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The government should control the amount of violence in films and on television in order to control violent crimes in society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this action?

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It is undeniable that movies, programmes and many sorts of media are filled with violent scenes and the consequences are that many crimes are committed with violence.
Therefore
, I agree with
this
 statement that government should do something to control
such
 content. Violence in the media brings on lots of adverse impact on the audience’s mindset. Brutality in
such
 programmes and movies may gradually change viewers attitudes, manners and personalities. The youth and children are likely to be the victims of
this
 because they are too immature to control their thoughts and actions. They are usually inspired by the heroism and individualism,
therefore
 solving problems and conflicts with physical power rather than consultation and conversation.
This
 often leads to crimes in school
such
 as bullying. Not only children, but
also
 adults are affected. Some might want to show off their power so they try to imitate what they see and there may be more serious crimes carried out
such
 as murder. If violence in movies and programmes are not controlled and censored, there are still negative influences on the audiences and more crimes are added to the social problems.
In addition
 to what is expressed above, I believe that it will be harder for governments to control illegal acts if sorts of media keep showing violent contents.
For example
, war documentaries which present the strategies used in war and films with ideas about crimes might be the sources for criminals to consult and do a ‘perfect’ crimes. The anti-crimes forces will have more difficulties in stopping criminals because they are more and more smart. In conclusion, I’m all in the favour of the idea that government should restrict the violent contents because it will decrease the numbers of offences committed and
also
 reduce the negative effects among citizens, especially the youth and children.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proliferation
  • normalize
  • desensitize
  • propensity
  • vulnerable populations
  • impressionable
  • emulate
  • stifles
  • creative freedom
  • censorship
  • slippery slope
  • media literacy
  • conclusively proven
  • socioeconomic conditions
  • mental health services
  • age ratings
  • content warnings
  • artistic freedom
  • informed choices
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