Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted.

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Nowadays we live in a very advanced era of technology

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the popularity of the

internet

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has improved every aspect of our daily life.There is

also

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an important link between the

internet

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and

education

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.Some people think that because of the

internet

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many students rely too much on the

internet

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however

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internet

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the internet

is a double-edged sword it should be limited use for

education

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.I disagree with it completely. On one hand

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to be

honest we

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honest, we

must admit that online

education

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is a good thing for students

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which is convenient for their learning environment and makes them more independent.

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However at

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However, at

the same time

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online

education

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also

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has many disadvantages.In the case of using online

education

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teachers often

can not rest

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can not, rest

cannot rest

assured

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they can not

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use

to the students' independent learning

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always worry about whether the students are in

class

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whether to understand

this

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series of questions.These are all the problem

for

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limited on online

education

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.For my example

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I am having a

class

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which is called e-learning

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it is a

class

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that we can

having

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have

it online with teacher

face

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face

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.Even so

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from the beginning of the online

class

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to now

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I have listened to every

class

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carefully but

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carefully, but

I think the efficiency of

this

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class

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is very low even we are

face

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face

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talking. On the other hands

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every one knows

internet

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has a lot of

information whether

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information, whether

it is good for students or not.Therefor

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the information on the

internet

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is very complex.Some students lack self-control when they are studying online

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which leads them to look at other websites and even play games while having online

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I have a high school classmate

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he is now at home because of corona-virus isolation and he is now having the online

class

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like me

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but every time he came to

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class he

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class, he

will always ask to play online games with him

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advice

give advice to

advise

him several times but he did not listen to my suggestion

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finally

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his parents found out and scolded him. In conclusion

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internet

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education

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is only useful to those who are willing to study.The teacher across the screen does not know what the students are doing

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and it is not as

efficiency

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efficient

efficiently

as being in a classroom.

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

343 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

accessibility
independent learning
critical thinking
excessive reliance
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crucial
problem-solving
overly dependent
diversity
perspectives
global cultures
enriching
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information overload
discerning
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Students are becoming more and more reliant on the Internet. While the Internet is convenient it has many negative effects and its use for educational purposes should be restricted.

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries are investing new technology to deal with the public. Why it is happening? Do you think it is an appropriate use of goverment money?

Nowadays there is a tendancy to relocate overseas for lucrative jobs.While a faction of people holds the notion that this movement is challanging (?)for juveniles, others argue that it is better for children.

Childood obesity is an increasing problem in Australia as many as two thirds of children are now obese. Schools have a responsilbility to monitor what their students eat and the amount of exercise they do. To what extend do you agree to this statement?