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Nowadays the amount of garbage we produce is increasing and this is becoming a global problem. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve this problem?

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It is undeniable that today, the increment of waste production has become one of the pressing issues of a global problem. There are various reasons for
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 phenomenon, but certain measures could be taken to address
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 problem. There are several causes for
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 situation. The main one is that people’s
lifestyle
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 changed
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this day
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 and they have adopted
a
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apply
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throwaway
habit
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habits
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 might be
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 their lack of knowledge
on
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(of) the length of time needed to decompose
plastic
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wastages
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.
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, some companies produce their products wrapped
with
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plastic
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 packaging.
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, a clothing item sold in retail stores is usually wrapped in
plastic
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 packaging.
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,
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 produces a lot of excess waste that will just get thrown out once the consumer has purchased the product. Various measures could be taken in order to address the above. In the first place, the government could launch a nationwide campaign to raise public awareness about the importance of recycling.
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, advertisements made by the
ministry
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 of
environment
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Environment
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 about the importance of recycling should be regularly shown on television and posters. By doing so, people will be more aware
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 reducing rubbish production. Another way forward could be for companies to replace the
plastic
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 packaging of their item
to
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with
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 an
environmental
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environmentally
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 friendly material
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 as paper.
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, excess waste
produce
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produced
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 by companies can be easily decomposed.
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, it is a fact that the increase in rubbish production caused by various factors is a global concern. Given
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 situation, it is recommended that steps should be taken immediately to address the problem above.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global problem
  • population growth
  • consumerism
  • throwaway culture
  • waste management
  • recycling facilities
  • excessive packaging
  • industrialization
  • urbanization
  • non-biodegradable materials
  • public awareness
  • stricter regulations
  • incentivize recycling
  • tax benefits
  • technological advancements
  • biodegradable materials
  • sustainable practices
  • composting
  • waste reduction
  • environmentally friendly
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