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Solar energy is becoming popular in many countries of the world because of its availability without any limit. Do the advantages of solar energy outweigh its disadvantages?

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It has been observed that a large number of nations are widely using the
energy
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 produced by the sun for their
day to day
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 life. Apart from its abundance
availability
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of availability
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, its advantages
overweigh
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 its drawbacks which are discussed
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.
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, there are some potential benefits
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 which many governments across the globe have started to allocate resources to harness solar
energy
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, particularly some developing countries whose major cities are dealing with pollution created by burning
of
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fossil fuels to meet
energy
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 demands.
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, solar
energy
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 is non-perishable which implies that the government will need to spend only on its installation without having to rely on the dwindling fossil fuels
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 as coal and oil. Another key benefit of switching to solar
energy
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 is that it is less vulnerable to natural disasters
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 as floods or any unforeseen incident which could disrupt the electricity supply to major cities.
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 but not least, solar panels require little maintenance
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 to thermal and hydropower plants which presents a significant strain on the budget of the government. But there are some potential drawbacks
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 which
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 adoption of solar
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 may not be possible in the near future. A major obstacle is the initial cost of solar panels and batteries which are quite expensive for middle-class people to afford. Another reason could be the weather in some places
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 as Europe and North America, which receive a little amount of sunshine,
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, complete reliance on solar
energy
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 to light
household
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 may not be feasible for countries in these regions. In conclusion,
although
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 solar
energy
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 has proven to be
cost effective
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, environment friendly and requires no dependence on fossil fuels, in my opinion, completely switching to solar
energy
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 may not be possible
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 its installation cost and limitations in places which do not receive sufficient sunshine required for solar panels to work and produce electricity for domestic sectors and houses.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable
  • inexhaustible
  • renewable energy
  • mitigating
  • initial setup cost
  • long-term savings
  • low maintenance
  • remote and rural areas
  • socio-economic development
  • intermittent
  • storage technologies
  • toxic materials
  • recycling and disposal mechanisms
  • job creation
  • economic growth
  • fossil fuels
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