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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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In
this
 millennium, the best way to solve
traffic
 issues is by giving
high
Suggestion
higher
rate
tax
 for
private vehicle
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private vehicles
a private vehicle
, and the fund could be used for improving public
transportation
 systems. The solution has its own merits and demerits. As per my personal view,
its
it is
it's
 good to charge
high
Suggestion
a high rate
high rates
rate
 of
tax
 from the private vehicle owners,
moreover it
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moreover, it
 is not only the factor which will reduce the
traffic
 problem. For a number of reasons, charging personal car owners with
high
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higher
tax
rate
 with
high
Suggestion
higher
tax
rate
 and distribute the fund for improving public
transportation
 brings a lot of benefits
for
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to
 the society. It is undeniable that with
the high
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higher
tax
rate
, the number of car owners will gradually decrease and
traffic
 problem would slowly decline.
As a result
, air pollution will
also
 be reduced.
Besides
 that, the collected
tax
 fund could be used to improve and manage public
transportation
, as a lot of people would change their mode of
transportation
 from personal cars into public
transportation
.
For example
, the government could replace all the old subway trains and buses with the new ones which consume fuel
efficiently
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efficient
efficiency
 and
more comfortable
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more comfortably
 for passengers.
Consequently
, the budget for public
transportation
 fuel could be reduced and
public
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public transportation users
transportation
 user would feel
comfort
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comfortable
 in using the facilities. In summary, the government should take all other factors into consideration before start taxing private car owners. The government should come out with a better solution that pinpoints the
traffic
 jam, but not private cars in
generally
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general
. (250 words)
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