The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the worldwide market share of the notebook computer market for manufacturers in the years 2006 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table chart illustrates the number of
computer’s
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notebook
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for makers in the global market in two different years
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2006 and 2007.
Overall
, the percentage of HP’s computer
notebook
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was
highest
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and there was
lowest
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proportion of Fujitsu-Siemens during the show period.
Also
,
while
the amount of Market Share in HP, Dell and Toshiba increased, a
reverse
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of the pattern was seen in the rest of
countries
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. In 2006, the amount of Market Share
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HP was 31.4%, which was higher
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13.8% than that of Dell. In the
next
year, both the figures
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increased slightly at around 34% and 20.2% respectively. At the same time, the figure for Toshiba rose from 6.2% to 7.3%.
It is clear that
there are four countries that climbed down about
this
type. By 2006, the figure for Acer was 11.6, which higher
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%
than
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Lenovo and the following
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year both of them drop
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10.7% and 6.2%.
Additionally
, Fujitsu and
others company
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other companies
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decreased significantly
about
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2.5% and 3.5 respectively.

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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • market share
  • percentage points
  • market presence
  • ranking
  • market leader
  • least market share
  • total market share
  • market consolidation
  • market diversification
  • new entrants
  • exits
  • highlight
  • compare
  • decline
  • increase
  • improvement
  • loss of ground
  • manufacturer
  • worldwide
  • notebook computer
  • notable
  • significant
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