In some countries, prisoners are allowed comfortable accomodation, good food and healthcare. Do you think this is appropriate? To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give some reasons and examples to support your position.

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Suggestion
It
is true that in some countries, prisoners are allowed comfortable accommodation, good food and
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
.
This
is deemed inappropriate by many individuals as there is a belief that prison should be a
punishment
for the crimes committed.
However
, it is
also
a view that jail is for rehabilitation rather than
punishment
.
Therefore
, in order to answer if it is appropriate for prisoners to have access to comfortable accommodation, good food and
healthcare
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health care
, we must ask what is the true aim of the prison system? The roots of crime are often a result of an individual’s alienation from society, which steals one’s dignity and self-worth.
Consequently
,
this
causes feelings of detachment and helplessness and destroys any feeling of personal responsibility to society.
As a result
of one’s apathy, an individual would have little objection to putting his personal welfare above that of the community by breaking the law. By taking away food,
healthcare
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health care
and appropriate accommodation
this
would
further
alienate an individual and provoke
further
bad behaviour when released back into the general public. The statement that rehabilitation is more effective than
punishment
is supported by the fact that in
Nordic countries
Suggestion
the Nordic countries
like
Sweden where
Accept comma addition
Sweden, where
prisons are about rehabilitation, there is a far lower crime and incarceration rate in comparison to the US and most European countries.
This
suggests that using
punishment
to rehabilitate a criminal is analogous to using an ice pack to fix a broken bone. Each remedy attempts to correct only the symptoms, but once they are taken away the problem is still there. As a weed must be torn out by its roots, crime must be eliminated by destroying its underlying causes.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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