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the graph shows goods transport in the UK(1974-2002)

the graph shows goods transport in the UK(1974-2002)
The amount of
goods
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 transported by four separate modes of transport, namely road,
water
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, rail and
pipeline
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 in the UK over a 28-year period from 1974 to 2002 is shown in the line graph, measured in
million
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 stones.
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, the highest amount of
goods
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was
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were
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 transported via roadway
whereas
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pipeline
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 remained the least commonly used mode of shipping over the entire period.
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 there were some fluctuations, transport by road,
water
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 and
pipeline
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 showed an upward trend
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/
whereas
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 transportation via rail reduced for a
while
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 before returning to the same levels. In 1974, around 70
million
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tonnes
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 of
goods
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 were transported by road and
this
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 quantity rose to about 100
million
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tonnes
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 towards the end of the span.
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Pipeline
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The pipeline
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 transported 5
million
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tonnes
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 of
goods
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 in 1974.
This
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 figure increased steadily over the years and in 2002, about 20
million
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tonnes
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 of
goods
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 were transported using
this
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 means. Both
water
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 and railways transported about 40
much
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apply
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tonnes
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 of
goods
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 in 1974 and that capacity remained more or less the same over the
next
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 four years. Afterwards, transport by
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water ways
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waterways
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 rose,
whereas
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 transportation by railways declined. During the period from 1986 to 1994, waterways transported around 60
million
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tonnes
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 of
goods
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.
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 quantity declined to around 50
million
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tonnes
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 in 1998 and rose to about 65
million
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tonnes
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 over the
next
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 four years.
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,
quantity
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the quantity
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 of transportation by rail declined to 30
million
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tonnes
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 in 1984 and showed fluctuations until 1998 before rising again to 40
million
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tonnes
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 in 2002.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next, whereas, while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words goods, water, pipeline, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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