‘Most high level jobs are done by men. Should the government encourage a certain percentage of these jobs to be reserved for women?”

There are more men with high
level
jobs in comparison with women with high
level
jobs. Many people think that the government should reserve a certain percentage of these jobs for women. In my opinion, I don’t agree with them.
First
of all I would like to say that there should be equal rights and opportunities for men and women. Men and woman are
equal so
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equal, so
women should not get special attention.
Second
of
all I
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all, I
would like to say that companies
can not
can not
cannot
be sure that the reserved high
level
jobs will be
applicated
bend or turn backward
replicated
by suitable women.
On the other hand
, Education? In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
think that the government should not encourage a certain percentage of high
level
jobs to be reserved for women. My arguments are that there should be equal rights and opportunities and that it is not sure that those jobs will be
applicated
bend or turn backward
replicated
by suitable women.

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