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You have friend who is about to go to a university, and he wants you to suggest to him on which course to take- philosophy, in which he is very interested, or computer science, which offers better job prospective.

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I received your letter two days ago, and I am
decided
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deciding
 to write back to you.
First
 of all, many congratulations on
enrolled
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enrolling
 in one of the world's prestigious
university
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universities
. I hope you and your family are extremely happy at
this
 time on your achievement. Coming to the point, I come to know that you are seeking some advice on your
subject
, with which course you have to move on. It’s really a dilemma for me
to
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for
 advice on the particular endorsement
on
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of
 it. As I have to conclude my decision on your selection, I advise you to choose both of those subjects and could go with a dual degree. I know, you are tremendously good at philosophy and of course, it is your one of the best
subject
. I tell you that you definitely come up with good results.
Furthermore
, you have to go with the
computer
subject
 as well. You must know that it is better to have some backup plan as a career perspective rather only interested one.
However
, I assume that philosophy is your
better
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best
subject
 selection; the
computer
 will provide you with an extreme career as of today's technological enhancement viewpoint. I utterly predict that you don't require much focus on philosophy, so keep your maximum effort on the
computer
 and try to learn maximum
computer
 languages as you can. I wish you better luck with your future
endeavors
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavours
.

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