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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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The given bar graph gives information about how often
people
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 in the USA eat in fast food restaurants by proportions over
10-year
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a 10-year
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 period.
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,
it is clear that
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Americans
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 preferred to eat fast
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foods
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 once a week or once or twice a month the most.
This
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 trend saw fluctuations from 2003 to 2013.
On the other hand
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, the lowest points in the graph were every day and never. These habits were stable over 10
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. Just under
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5% of
Americans
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 ate fast
foods
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 every day in 2003 and
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 dropped slightly in 2006,
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following
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the following
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years
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 remained stable. Nearly one in five
people
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 in America preferred to eat fast
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foods
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 every other day in 2003. By 2006
this
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 trend rose modestly to exactly 20% and
then
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 saw a gentle decrease
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 5%. Totally, the most chosen eating fast food habit by
Americans
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 is only once a week.
While
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this
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 increased slightly from 2003 to 2006, it saw a remarkable decline in 2013 by almost 10%.
One
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third
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 of
Americans
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 ate fast
foods
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 rarely.
Although
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this
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 habit decreased gradually between 2003 and 2003, there was a sharp rise in 2013 by roughly 15%. The proportion of
people
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 who ate fast
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foods
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food
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 a few times a year was just under 15% in 2003 and
this
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 habit increased slightly to 15%,
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in
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following
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the following
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years
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 it maintained steady.
People
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 who never ate in fast food restaurants was 5% in 2003, the following
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years
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,
this
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 trend fell slightly and stayed stable.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, americans, foods, years with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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