Some people think government should ban dangerous sports, such as skydiving and rock climbing. Do you agree or disagree.

Some people claim that the government should be more aware and stop letting the dangerous sports happening
such
as skydiving and rock climbing. Personally speaking, I disagree with
this
statement because I believe that there are many people who are doing
this
sport for fun and
this
is their way to reconnect with themselves or with nature. The
governement
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
should not ban these kind of sports, mainly because those people who are practicing it, are doing it on their own responsibility. Dangerous sports are for dangerous people who take risks and by jumping off
from
Suggestion
of
a cliff or climbing on a dangerous rock they are testing themselves and their courage.
Furthermore
, government should be
preocupied
deeply absorbed in thought
preoccupied
with anything else but not banning these kind of sports

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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