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People living in large cities today face many problems in their everyday life. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller regional towns?

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In recent years, there have been a number of everyday problems that people in big cities have to cope with.
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 essay will discuss two major problems, corruption and knowledge overload, which I believe should lead governments to encourage people to move to regional areas. These days, increased levels of pollution have been a great cause for concern among residents of big cities. Due to high volumes of traffic, large quantities of pollutants are being released into the atmosphere, causing the degradation of air quality, which is said to be a significant contributor to various types of respiratory disease,
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 as lung cancer.
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, people in big cities are being bombarded with too much intelligence from the media, including TV, social media, and advertising, with a large proportion of
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 information being fake or exaggerated.
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 can lead to confusion or, in some cases, social anarchy. In my opinion, governments should do what they can to encourage city residents to move to regional areas.
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, it will reduce the number of vehicles in cities, which will definitely reduce the levels of air pollution, which is hazardous to the health of citizens.
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, fewer people living in big cities will relieve the pressure on the housing supply, where many people are forced to live in small, uncomfortable spaces. Studies have shown that people’s living spaces have a direct impact on their mental health and how they perform at work. In conclusion, severe air pollution and a bombardment of information are among the most serious problems facing city residents nowadays, and personally, I feel that authorities should encourage people to relocate to other areas to live.

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