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24. In some countries, young people are encouraged to work and travel for a year finishing high school and starting university study. Discuss advantage and disadvantage for your people who decide to do it

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Nowadays, many students opt to take one
year
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 for
work
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 and travel between the high school and university.
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negative
 aspects of
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 and provide relevant examples.
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 of all, taking one
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 for
work
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 and travelling will allow new students to earn money before the university life. It is evident that the studying at the high - education place requires a big amount of money if you do not have a scholarship. Students want to live comfortably without their parents and the one
year
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 of working can help them to insure themselves.
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,
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 period
will
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will be
 the best choice if you want to gain a new job experience. The future students - the future workers, and it is great when they have a perception of how the industry works and maybe they will change their minds and decide not to go to the university or get a
high
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higher
 education.
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, there are some drawbacks of taking
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gap
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a gap year
the gap year
gap years
year
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.
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, young people can prefer to continue the job because they do no have to study anything. They feel themselves comfortable and it is not needed to go somewhere to study;
however
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, education is important in our life and these people can do the
work
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 and study altogether. Another problem of
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gap
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the gap year
a gap year
year
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 is that not everyone can afford
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. Travelling is an expensive hobby and
as a result
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, people who took the
gap
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year
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 do nothing.
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 students do not
work
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 or travel, they spend their time by playing computer games and hanging out with their friends. In conclusion,
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 the
gap
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year
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 can effect in a good way for teenagers,
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 as job experience and independent from parents, it can be bad if they pass
this
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year
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 by doing non-useful things like clubs and playing computer games.

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