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Climate change is an issue. Do you agree with this?

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People generally live in an apartment, especially in big cities because there are many people in big cities, but there is a shortage of space to build up houses. You can have your own garden in which you can do gardening, have a rest, spend
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 with your family and friends. You are likely to have more space if you live in a
house
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. You can throw a party at your
house
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 and listen to music loudly at
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 party, and it is less likely that someone makes a complaint about it. I think not everyone would want to live in a larger
house
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 because some people just like to live in a small
place
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. You don'
t
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 spend much
time
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 cleaning your
house
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 if you live in a small
place
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. It is easy to heat or cool a small
place
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. You can keep everything under control in a small
place
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. I think it is not hard to find a
place
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 in my
country but
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country, but
 it depends on your budget. If you have a good budget, you can find very good
place
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 easily in a short
time
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. In my opinion, it is better to rent a
place
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 rather than buying a
house
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 because to buy a
house
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 you need to have accumulated money in your account,
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, you would have to take credit from a bank, and you would have to pay it back with a certain amount of interest, and it would mean that you couldn'
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 take any radical decision in your life unless you finish paying the loan back. I think it depends on one's unique situation. If a person has a job and earns enough money to maintain his
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her life, s
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he may end up living with his
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her family and may think of starting his
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her own life. I don'
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 go out with my friends very often because I don'
t
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 have much free
time
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, and in my limited spare
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, I
also
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 want to stay with
myself
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me
. I can talk about Çağrı. He is one of my friends from university. Actually, we were not from the same faculty, we met through a common friend. We have
many
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much
 in common and like to spend
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 together from
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 to
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. I am not very friendly with my neighbours. I treat them well, but I don'
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 want to be close with them, so I am kind of cold when I run into them. I think my family is more important to me. I love my friends, but family is different. They brought up you, and they know you since you were born. They love you unconditionally, and they are with you when you have a problem that even your friends cannot help.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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