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The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the costs of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below
The first graph,
bar
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 graph communicates the percentage of adults choosing the reason for
education
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, and the pie chart describes the percentage of courses based on their cost in adult
education
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. As an initial overview, most
of
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the
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apply
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mature people prefer
education
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 because of their interest in the subject.
However
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, the least wanted to educate themselves to connect with people.
Accordingly
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, the expenditure on
taxpayer
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taxpayers
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 must be low for adult
education
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 and high
on
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 the Individual. Moving forward with specific details, adults' motive to qualify is slightly different from their subjective interest by 2%.
Additionally
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, the reason for getting the job is 10
percent
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per cent
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 greater than their desire to switch
the
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job.
Moreover
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, the factors with similar choices of studying are enjoying
in
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learning and improvement in promotions by 20.
According to
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 the survey, the public opinion for cost-sharing is majorly by Individuals
that is
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 40,
whereas
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 the least expenditure should be for the Taxpayer 35
percent
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per cent
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. As
the
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a
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 final note, employers' contribution to adult
education
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 is 35
percent
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per cent
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage distribution
  • stakeholders
  • pursue further education
  • financial contribution
  • survey results
  • policy implications
  • correlation
  • adult education
  • distribution of costs
  • significant differences
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