Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health, others believe that government should make sure that their are healthy.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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I think everybody should take
care
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of their
health
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.Because we know that
heath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
is wealth.Now a
days
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day
life is not simple.People are very busy their life
sechdule
plan for an activity or event
schedule
schedules
.So we can not
proper
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properly
take
care
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our
heath
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
health
.
Thats
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That's
why many
diesease
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
diseases
disease
dishes
will attack our
health
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suddenly.And we
cannt
can not
cannot
recover from
this
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disease.
some
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Some
disease
are
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is
very
dangourours
involving or causing danger or risk; liable to hurt or harm
dangerous
like cancer
,
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,
heart attack
,
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,
corona etc.If we should not any prevention from
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,
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,
then
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definately
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
we have faced
big problem
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big problems
a big problem
the big problem
in our life
.
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.
some
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Some
people think that government should do something
for
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about
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health issue
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health issues
the health issue
.
yes I
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Yes, I
Yes I
definately
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
support that
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
should launch free
health
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services and
health
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schemes for people. But if we do not take
care
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our own
health
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,
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,
so what
goverment
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the government
government
should do for ourselves.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
I think it's pure responsibility to take
care
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our
health
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.And every month we should
health
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checkup from any reputed doctor.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventive healthcare
  • public health infrastructure
  • health literacy
  • wellness programs
  • fiscal policies
  • lifestyle diseases
  • universal healthcare
  • regulatory frameworks
  • socio-economic determinants of health
  • holistic health approach
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