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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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Over past year's
crime
 rate has witnessed a decline on account of technological evolution, which can
also
 help in prevention and resolution. In my opinion, I agree that the use of
technology
 facilitates in minimizing
crime
.
However
, I believe it
also
 eases people to commit
crime
. There is no doubt that advancement in
technology
 plays a pivotal role in gathering data from different sources and making it available in a single platform which can be used for various purposes.
For instance
, Digitization of criminal records and other important data relate to
crime
 has enabled authorities around the globe to keep a track of offenders and maintain law and order. To illustrate
this
, Interpol is an international organization that maintains the data of drug cartel and international mafia enable states to trace
such
 criminals without difficulty and take any action with sufficient evidence.
Furthermore
, if people are aware of being monitored, they will tend to abide by laws and avoid endangering themselves by getting involved in unlawful activities.
For example
, installing speed cameras along highway has curtailed traffic crimes in Pakistan.
On the other hand
, Technological advancement has given birth to various other crimes
such
 as cyber scamming and hacking other system with accessing personal information without the consent to breach security systems.
For instance
, over the past years, various cases have been reported over the misuse of personal information that it is being sold to
third party
Suggestion
a third party
third parties
 without the permission.
Furthermore
, hackers have hacked many charity websites to fraud money. In conclusion, it is worth to appreciate that a significant reduction in
crime
 has been blessed by use of
technology
 by providing easy access of information to law agencies despite the criticism that the use of
technology
 has given appearances of cybercrimes.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surveillance cameras
  • advanced security systems
  • potential criminals
  • law enforcement
  • AI (artificial intelligence)
  • big data analytics
  • forensic science
  • public awareness
  • social media
  • online platforms
  • crime prevention
  • crime rates
  • counterargument
  • cybercrime
  • technological misconduct
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