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studying at university in your hometown where your family lives or studying at university in a different city far from your family.

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studying
Suggestion
Studying
 at university in your
hometown
 where your family lives or studying at university in a different
city
 far from your family. Most students struggle while making a choice between studying in their
hometown
 or studying in another
city
. Sometimes
this
 can be confusing for the student. Both the choices have their own positives and negatives, which the essay will discuss. Studying university in another
city
 teaches people a lot,
such
 as how to cook, how to manage money etc. Absolutely can be more free than study in
hometown
. You will be more independent and grown. Acquired these personal skills will be helpful in future problems.
Besides
 these advantages, there are some disadvantages
such
 as friendship relations, cultural differences, accent of different
city
.
On the other hand
, There are many advantages where studies in
hometown
. You don’t need to rent a house
,
Accept space
,
cook a meal and give the money to transportation in
this
 way you can save money.
Also you
Accept comma addition
Also, you
 can find a job easily. You don’t have to adapt to own
city
.
Although
Suggestion
Despite
 these advantages, there are some disadvantages.
For instance
, you will still under your parents’ rules when you are staying with them and you cannot learn how to live single-independent of the family.
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