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ailenin yaşadığı memleketindeki üniversitede okumak ya da ailenizden farklı bir şehirde üniversitede okumak

#ailenin #yaşadığı #memleketindeki #üniversitede #okumak #ya #ailenizden #farklı #bir #şehirde
Hemen hemen herkes üniversitede akademik eğitim almak istiyor. Herkesin farklı rüyası, amacı ve hedefi vardır. Asıl soru, memleketinizde veya şehir dışında nerede çalışacağınızdır Ailenizle yaşıyorsanız sorun yoktur, çünkü evde kendi odanız olduğu için, yaşadığınız insanları ve en önemlisi de çok iyi biliyorsunuz. eve geldiğinde kapıyı açacak biri
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Different
 dream
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 aim and target. The real question is where to study in your hometown or out of the city If you live with your family there is no problem because you have your own room in the house
,
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 you know very well the people you live with and most important one there is somebody to open the door when you come home Another point in studying university is learning life or
learning academic
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learning, academic
 lessons only. If one is going university
,
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 he should learn the life
also
. When you stay with your family you
can not
can not
cannot
 learn anything about
life
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life, for
for
example you
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example, you
 can not learn how to pay the bills
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 find the cheapest and best furniture
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 make suitable shopping or entertain a guest and you
can not
can not
cannot
 deal with the problems you face with because your parents are
everytime
 over there and waiting for help you.
In contrast
 to
this
 studying in another city away from your family you learn everything
also
 you become a real adult
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 you have your all own
resposibility
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
 and feel yourself more and more brave
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 you learn how to decide.
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