The bar chart below shows the employment of all male and female workers by occupation in the UK in the year 2005.

The given bar chart reveals the data about employment both genders in the 9 occupations in the UK, in 2005. Overall, it can be seen from the provided figure that the most male were interested in skilled trades, managers and senior officials, while most females interested in personal service, administrative and secretarial. As is shown in the figure, mostly male workers were interested in skilled trades, managers and senior officials, where they showed 20% and 17%, respectively, while the rate of female in
this
sector were 2% and 12%.
By contrast
, the most percentage of female workers were related to the administrative and secretarial, and personal service, showing 22% and 14%, while male workers showed 5% and 3% appropriately. With regards to other sectors, their rate was equal, being around 10%.

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