The bar chart below shows the employment of all male and female workers by occupation in the UK in the year 2005.
The given bar chart reveals the data about employment
both
genders in the 9 occupations in the UK, in 2005.
Change preposition
for both
Overall
, it can be seen from the provided figure that the
most male Correct article usage
apply
were
interested in skilled trades, managers and senior officials, Change the verb form
was
while
most females interested
in personal service, Add a missing verb
were interested
administrative
and secretarial.
As is shown in the figure, Replace the word
administration
mostly
male workers were interested in skilled trades, managers and senior officials, where Correct your spelling
most
they
showed 20% and 17%, respectively, Correct pronoun usage
apply
while
the rate of female in this
sector were
2% and 12%. Change the verb form
was
By contrast
, the most percentage of female workers were related to the
administrative and secretarial, and personal Correct article usage
apply
service
, showing 22% and 14%, Fix the agreement mistake
services
while
male workers showed 5% and 3% appropriately. With regards to other sectors, their rate was equal, being around 10%.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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