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The line chart illustrates the amount of money in US dollars paid on cars in China, Vietnam, Thailand, and Indonesia from the years 1995 until 2005.

The line chart illustrates the amount of money in US dollars paid on cars in China, Vietnam, Thailand, and Indonesia from the years 1995 until 2005.
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The line chart illustrates the
amount
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 of money in US dollars paid on
cars
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 in China, Vietnam, Thailand, and Indonesia for the years 1995 until 2005.
Overall
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, the
amount
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 of money spent on
cars
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 in all four countries had increased. China had the highest
amount
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 over the entire period,
while
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 Indonesia started the lowest but dramatically increased. Thailand remained relatively stable over the given period. China spent within a range of around $80
million
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 and just $90
million
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 from 1995 to 2003, the largest
amount
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 of money spent on
cars
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 in all four countries. Vietnam placed the
second
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-highest
started
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starting
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 at just above $50
million
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 in 1995 and
experienced
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experiencing
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 a consistent increase year after year until 2005 to just above $70
million
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. Indonesia started the lowest,
spent
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spending
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 $30
million
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 in 1995 and the
amount
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had
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increased by around $10
million
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in
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from
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 1999 to 2001 before a tremendous rise of just over $60
million
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 and just above $70
million
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 in 2003 and 2005, respectively. Thailand's expenses on
cars
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 shifted within the range of around $50 and just above $60
million
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 from 1995 until 2005.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 93%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, cars, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line chart
  • amount of money
  • paid on cars
  • China
  • Vietnam
  • Thailand
  • Indonesia
  • 1995
  • 2005
  • significant increase
  • highest amount
  • steady growth
  • lowest overall spending
  • started at
  • doubled
  • nearly
  • reached
  • exceeded
  • among
  • half a billion dollars
  • conclusion
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