Death penalty is still practiced in jurisdiction system of many countries. Some people believe that this type of punishment should be abolished. However, others are of opposite opinion. Discuss both sides of this debate and give your own opinion.

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the death penalty is legal in several countries,

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will be who support

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. There are several arguments on both sides of

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very sensitive issue, and I will discuss them now. On the one hand, opponents of

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penalty note that capital

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is disturbing human moral rights, and it is basically a wrong way to

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revenge .

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for the most dangerous criminals is old, even

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offender is incorrigible and contradictions of that system suggest reform or

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a new

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system.

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, we do not give the prisoners a second chance to change.

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, many cases had been when the real criminal escaped

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trial and the innocent soul of

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claimed to

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of false claims.

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, advocates of

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is the most humane way to get rid of a person who does not have moral ethics.

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against society never

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kind of threat to people.

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, capital

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people an idea of what the law is capable of doing and the criminal can never escape from the

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no matter who.

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, we can say that capital

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is the harsh reality of our world.

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, on one hand, it decreases the crime rate and on the other violates many human rights.

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, all these types of

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are not justifying and

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must find an alternative for it.

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Ensure that your essay fully addresses the prompt and provides a balanced discussion of both sides of the debate. Support your arguments with specific examples, and avoid jumping to conclusions in your closing statements.

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Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

capital punishment
jurisdiction
deterrent
morality
rehabilitation
wrongful convictions
innocence
retribution
ethical dilemmas
life sentence
judicial system
human rights
lethal injection
electric chair
justice
penal system
recidivism
appeal process
clemency
miscarriage of justice

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