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Being a celebrity can bring benefits and problems at the same time. To what extent do you agree on this statement?

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A famous
person
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 or
celebrity
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 becomes popular through the media as well as due to people
celebrity
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 brings benefits along with problems.
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 with, there are many benefits of being a
celebrity
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Firstly
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, as a
celebrity
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 become its own image or dignity. Everyone knows
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 a famous
person
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Secondly
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, every
person
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 gives regards and respect to the famous
person
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, Amir Khan is a famous personality. Most of the people give respect and like his acting, work or physique.
Thirdly
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, famous
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 has more money, comfort devices and more property.
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Moreover they
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Moreover, they
 can bring what they want.
On the other hand
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, there are more problems for
celebrity
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 of all, famous
person
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 cannot go anywhere lonely and cannot enjoy freedom with family.
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, famous
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 does not have enough time for their family and pursue their hobbies.
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, famous
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 has to go anywhere with security because of the crowd.
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 to
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, due to popular media always spread the news regarding famous
person
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, media create issues regarding personal or family problems. In conclusion, will a famous film star or sportsman takes more benefits, but, we cannot deny about negative effects.
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