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Life has become much more stressfull compared to our parent’s generation.As a result stress related illnesses are increasing around the world.Why is stress such a problem in the modern world and what do you think can be done to overcome the problems caused by stress?

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Nowadays
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stress
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 has become a serious
problems
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problem
 than it was in the past.Many different diseases are caused by
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 over the world.In today's
world people
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world, people
 are asking themselves why
stress
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 is
such
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 an issue and how can we deal to overcome
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this problems
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this problem
these problems
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eassay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
 will
doscuss
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
discus
discussed
 about the
stress
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 related illness and solutions to
deal these problems
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deal with these problems
. In
this
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 modern era,
stress
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 can bring a lot of consequences among them one is it is harmful to one's health and
wellbeing
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well being
. To illustrate, chronic diseases
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sleep disorders
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strains relations, depression
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anxiety
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loss of self esteem cause tension
in person life
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in a person's life
in person's life
.
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One of my
uncle
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uncles
 is a
businessman he
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businessman, he
 every time thinks about
making
engage in
doing
 his business best and earn money always focus on work and take
alot
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a lot
 of pressure of his work due
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 he even can't sleep properly at night time and has
disorder
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a disorder
the disorder
. One of the key to
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 free life is management of tension
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There are various techniques to deal with the pressure like changing of lifestyles
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diet
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yoga
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meditation
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identifying
stress
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 and take a break from
stressors
the relative prominence of a syllable or musical note (especially with regard to stress or pitch)
stress
. But every person has their own way to relief strain.
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when
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 have a lot of tension
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 like to meditate and sit
alone but
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alone, but
 during
stress
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 more my brother like to watch
movie
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a movie
movies
the movie
. To sum up,Life has become more stressful for our generation than parents generations and thoughtful measures could be taken to address
this
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 issue including strong relationship,engagement in activities and working smarter than harder

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