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More and more students choose to move to other oversea countries to have the higher education. Does the trend bring more benefits than disadvantages? What is your opinion?

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There is an argument about students who are moving and studying abroad to have a better
education
.
This
 essay will discuss both views and believes that it is beneficial to
further
 studies overseas. There are many downsides of pursuing
education
 in another
country
, one is the expensive tuition fee and standard of living. Students in a foreign
country
 are sometimes forced to have multiple jobs in order to cope with paying school fees as well as to live. Filipino students who are continuously studying in
United Kingdom
Suggestion
the United Kingdom
for example
. They were interviewed by a broadcasting network about their struggles of paying bills. They mentioned that they do not get any days off in a week to enable them to survive.
On the other hand
, to study and live in a different
country
 is
also
 fulfilling once you have achieved an advanced and quality
education
.
Education
 might be costly, but once a learner
have
Suggestion
has
 the diploma, it could unfold tons of priceless opportunities.
For instance
, an Asian student who pursued
masteral degree
Suggestion
a masteral degree
 in Kutztown University of
Pensylvannia
a Mid-Atlantic state; one of the original 13 colonies
Pennsylvania
 in United States have been offered jobs from various companies and countries. The student has
also
 helped his motherland by sharing knowledge to the residents as an educator. In conclusion, continuing study, especially in a foreign land will indeed amount to hundreds or even thousands
however
,
education
 is
also
 so precious that no one can take it away from someone.
Therefore
, the writer strongly believes that it is more beneficial compared to learning in your own
country
.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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