In many countries people tend to move overseas or move to a different par of their country after the retirement Discuss why they do so and what the outcome of this situation is. Provide specific reasons and example to spport your opinion.

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After
the
retirement
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, some people go to
foreign land
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foreign lands
a foreign land
or move to
different part
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a different part
different parts
of their county. They will itineracy in their country or in other countries. It depends on their choice or economic conditions. I feel
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way for two reasons which
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easy
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First
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of all, Now a days everyone is so busy with their work that they do not get
time
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to go anywhere.
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Hence after
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Hence, after
the
retirement
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there is a
time
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when everyone can
lives
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live
as they wish. So people want to enjoy
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free
time
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to the fullest. Because they were unable to spend
time
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with their children in busy schedules while on
there
of them or themselves
their
jobs. That's
way
the cause or intention underlying an action or situation, especially in the phrase 'the whys and wherefores'
why
people go to their favourite places and spend free
time
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with their choice. My personal experience is a compelling example of
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topic after
retirement
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from my grandfather's army job, he went to every
places
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place
where he wanted to go.
On the other hand
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, After
retirement
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, people spend their lifetime
earning
the excess of revenues over outlays in a given period of time (including depreciation and other non-cash expenses)
earnings
in different ways. Because they were just thinking about moving somewhere and
spebding
the act of spending or disbursing money
spending
time
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with family while on the job and they will enjoy the money, they earned through jobs. According to my own opinion, it is like childhood to travel to
different place
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different places
a different place
. But the actual happiness of roaming around with your own money and family is different.
This
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is right
time
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people enjoy it. All of the being said, I believe after leaving the job, people go abroad or different part of their country for happiness, enjo
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(fun), satisfaction, and refresh their mind because never before had
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a big travel for
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enjoying
y and tension free being displayed

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