In many countries people tend to move overseas or move to a different par of their country after the retirement Discuss why they do so and what the outcome of this situation is. Provide specific reasons and example to spport your opinion.

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After

the

retirement

, some people go to

foreign land

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foreign lands

a foreign land

or move to

different part

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a different part

different parts

of their county. They will itineracy in their country or in other countries. It depends on their choice or economic conditions. I feel

this

way for two reasons which

refers to the speaker or writer

will explore in

this

following

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an analytic or interpretive literary composition

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easy

issue

First

of all, Now a days everyone is so busy with their work that they do not get

time

to go anywhere.

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Hence, after

the

retirement

there is a

time

when everyone can

lives

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live

as they wish. So people want to enjoy

this

free

time

to the fullest. Because they were unable to spend

time

with their children in busy schedules while on

there

of them or themselves

their

jobs. That's

way

the cause or intention underlying an action or situation, especially in the phrase 'the whys and wherefores'

why

people go to their favourite places and spend free

time

with their choice. My personal experience is a compelling example of

this

topic after

retirement

from my grandfather's army job, he went to every

places

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place

where he wanted to go.

On the other hand

, After

retirement

, people spend their lifetime

earning

the excess of revenues over outlays in a given period of time (including depreciation and other non-cash expenses)

earnings

in different ways. Because they were just thinking about moving somewhere and

spebding

the act of spending or disbursing money

spending

time

with family while on the job and they will enjoy the money, they earned through jobs. According to my own opinion, it is like childhood to travel to

different place

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different places

a different place

. But the actual happiness of roaming around with your own money and family is different.

This

is right

time

people enjoy it. All of the being said, I believe after leaving the job, people go abroad or different part of their country for happiness, enjo

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(fun), satisfaction, and refresh their mind because never before had

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a big travel for

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In many countries people tend to move overseas or move to a different par of their country after the retirement Discuss why they do so and what the outcome of this situation is. Provide specific reasons and example to spport your opinion.

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