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The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts give information about the most popular downside and upside of Bowen island
due to
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research
of
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travellers. The most common benefit is the residents which
is
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 42
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percent
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per cent
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,
while
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 the accommodation is the lowest with 11
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percent
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. The
second
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 highest category is the scenery which takes 35
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percent
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per cent
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 and 12
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percent
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per cent
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 of visitors
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 the culture.
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, there are a few disadvantages. The highest percentage of tourists
which
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 reply high cost of living is 50
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percent
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per cent
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. The proportion of visitors
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who
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respon
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respond
lack
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 of entertainment and weather accounts for 25
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percent
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per cent
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 and 15
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percent
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per cent
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.
Also
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, only 10
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percent
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per cent
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 of travellers say poor food quality.
Overall
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of visitors who travel
in
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 Bowen island like the citizen and
and
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the scenery the most.
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, 75
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percent
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per cent
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 of travellers
which
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apply
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dislike most is
high
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the high
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 cost of living and
the
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entertainment.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • According to the survey
  • Visitors reported
  • The pie charts show
  • The most common advantages/disadvantages
  • A significant proportion
  • A small percentage
  • In contrast
  • Notably
  • The largest segment
  • Similarly
  • On the other hand
  • A major advantage/disadvantage
  • To highlight
  • Overall effect
  • Impact the experience
  • In summary
  • Illustrates
  • Reflects
  • Highlights
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