Some people believe that not all criminals should be kept I prison, but that some of them should be allowed to do unpaid work to help the community.

Nowadays, the number of crimes all over the world
is on the increase and most sociologists regard
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is on the increase and most sociologists regarding
is on the increase and most sociologists regarded
is on the increase and most sociologists regard
this
a result of unemployment, poverty and lack of education. While a group of people argue that offenders should be punished by going to
jails
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jail
, I believe that doing unsalaried work in the
community
would be more beneficial for the people, prisons and the criminals. There are a variety of reasons why I would argue that doing unpaid work in the local
community
would be a positive scheme.
Firstly
, governments would not suffer from the expeditions that prisoners and prisons bring about.
Secondly
, rehabilitation programs help offenders to learn some vocational training that
are
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is
useful in their future life.
Finally
, other offenders who are
at
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in
prisons may have an adverse effect on them which will encourage offenders to commit more crimes.
Furthermore
, jail punishment is not a deterring act against crime and it would not diminish the violence and criminal acts in
society
. A salient example of
this
is
USA
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the USA
that could decrease the crime statistics up to 30% by educating criminals
and
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And
teaching them vocational training which lead to better job opportunities for the criminals.
Although
they had criminal records which makes finding a job more difficult, they could obtain a satisfactory job.
On the other hand
, most of the criminals re
offend
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offends
after releasing from prison into
society
and they usually break the law in order to making a living since they have no experience at works.
Furthermore
, rehabilitation programs would benefit the
society
and criminals. They can do some
community
work in their
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
such
as talking to schools or cleaning the streets.
As a result
, the students who dropped out of schools or those who are under peer pressure would be less likely to become delinquent. TO support my claim, I can refer to an article having been published in
Times magazine
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the Times magazine
, indicates that rehabilitation programs make awareness among juveniles, parents and the offenders and
this
programs
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program
could stop the
fast
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Fast
raise in criminal records. In conclusion,
although
prisons play a central role in punishment and are appropriate places for those who committed
sever
intensely or extremely bad or unpleasant in degree or quality
severe
crimes
such
as killing, the role of
community
services in training offenders should not be neglected. I assert that all humans have the ability to turn into good, positive people who are beneficial for their
society
and family.

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