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Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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People migrate from one country to another to secure their future. These knowledgeable young aspirants move to the Developed Nations in search of better jobs. Talented and Well-educated persons from Underdeveloped Nations must be given an equal opportunity.
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 essay agrees with the opinion and detailed reasoning will be given in the following paragraphs.
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 with, Nationality comes after the person's achievements and abilities. The more Valuable the human assets are, the more growth will be seen in the bucolic.
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, it will be more beneficial for the whole Nation.
Secondly
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, the zeal he showed to get the high salaried job in well prosperous country, that will be continued to increase the progress of that company.
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, in America, the CEO of Google, Sunder Pichai made extraordinary efforts to develop the unique software and he uplifted the homey's image and profits.
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 company remembered the genius of the Indian Origin and promoted him.
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, underdeveloped nations will become poorer and richer nations will become richer. But, the respect of that province will become better in the eyes of the whole world. Employees after gaining experience from big MNCs invest in their own nation and
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, becomes inspirational for all and
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, the poorer rustic start showing progress. To conclude, an equal preference must be given to each and every person, irrespective of their nationality. In my opinion,
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 will benefit both the respective countries in respect of the growth and the prosperity.
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