The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the diagram.

The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown in the diagram.
The given diagram explains how
sun emitted
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energy gets trapped in our atmosphere
due to
the
greenhouse
effect
. It is evident that logging of trees and fossil
fuel driven
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fuel-driven
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vehicles worsen the
greenhouse
effect
. Getting back to the details, sunlight that reaches the
earth
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surface creates
heats
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heat
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and a large portion of
this
heat was supposed to radiate back to Space without any hindrance.
However
,
this
is not the case and a great proportion of heat energy remains on earth
due to
different
greenhouse
gases. Though some sunlight is reflected off our atmosphere for the presence of the white cloud in the sky, a large portion of the heat created by sunlight rays
do
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not leave the surface. Tree logging is a reason for
enhanced
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the enhanced
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greenhouse
effect
as less tree means less absorption of CO2, which is the main gas of
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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problem. Another aspect that enhances the average surface temperature by contributing to
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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phenomenon is
the
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fossil fuel.
This
fuel is used to run different water and Highland vehicles and is responsible for the increasing emission of carbon dioxide gas. It is evident that to reduce the average temperature which is basically generated by the
greenhouse
effect
, we need more trees and less use of fossil fuels to drive our cars and ships.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words greenhouse, effect with synonyms.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • natural process
  • greenhouse effect
  • Earth's surface
  • sun's energy
  • atmosphere
  • reflected
  • absorbed
  • re-radiated
  • greenhouse gases
  • carbon dioxide
  • methane
  • nitrous oxide
  • water vapour
  • ultraviolet radiation
  • infrared radiation
  • fossil fuel burning
  • deforestation
  • concentration
  • global warming
  • melting ice caps
  • glaciers
  • rising sea levels
  • extreme weather patterns
  • mitigating
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